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It was a busy day at the Red Apple pub; the crowd had all filed in the moment the torrential downpour had begun outside, all looking for a place to dry off and relax. Of course, Fluttershy contemplated, Apple-Jack couldn't be happier with the boom in service; she'd even managed to convince SweetieBelle and Scootaloo to help the Apple family (+ Pinkie + Octavia) with the customers.

VinylScratch and Ditzy 'Derpy' Doo, the pub's ukulele player, were taking a short break, both sat either side of Fluttershy. Derpy was trying to light her cigarette, the lighter refusing to comply as Dr. Whooves, her special someone, fetched drinks. Vinyl was happily sharing some of Fluttershy's tea, muttering something about 'alcohol' and 'lent' and 'stupid upbringings'.

Fluttershy shifted slightly, opening her mouth hesitantly but then closed it again, a frown on her face. Vinyl noticed, glancing at her in a sidelong fashion.
"What?"

"Oh, um… no, don't worry… it's nothing…." Fluttershy muttered in her usual, shy way, blushing furiously as she tucked a strand of long hair behind her ear. Vinyl shrugged, taking a sip of tea.

As Octavia walked by, Vinyl sent a hand out to pinch her butt, smiling to herself. Octavia swerved, avoiding the pinch and, reaching for Vinyl's outstretched hand with her own, took it and kissed Vinyl's knuckles. Vinyl blushed as Octavia winked, continuing to hand out drinks to the waiting customers: normally, she would be playing the bass instruments for the pub, but had agreed to give an extra helping hand in the busy hours of the evening.
Fluttershy smiled as she watched the scene play out then her expression suddenly drooped into a frown again and she sighed, turning back around to her tea. Vinyl  glanced at her then also sighed.

"Just ask what you want to ask, okay?" Fluttershy sighed again, tucking a strand of hair behind her ear before it made its way into her tea.

"Vinyl… um, if you don't mind me asking… Um… How did you and Octavia… get… together?" she asked, her face flushing a brilliant shade of embarrassed red. Vinyl smiled.

"That story, eh?"

"It'th a thilly thtory." Derpy muttered beside them, taking a drag from her now lit cigarette as Dr. Whooves appeared beside her, placing a drink in front of her,
"Thankth, babe." She said as Whooves kissed the top of her sandy blonde head with a smile.

"Yes, well it's better than yours." Vinyl retorted, poking her tongue out childishly at Derpy who rolled her crossed eyes, "Anyhoo, so what happened, what happened…
Well, we'd been friends for a long long time before it happened, you know? We'd known each other since High School and miraculously ended up in the same sixth form college and then the same University and… We'd known each other forever pretty much. One morning, Octavia wanted us to work on a song together down here at the Apple and I was all for it. I'd had a crush on her since our third year of High School together, but expected it to just be a phase or something… but it never went away. Anyway, so it was, like, a crisp golden day and I couldn't have felt any better-"

"No it wathn't, it wath foggy, and about theven in the morning. You were crabby coth you'd tripped over the cat and had thpilt tea all down your favourite jeanth. And you hadn't had breakfatht." Derpy butted in, not even looking at Vinyl who shot a glare at her as she sipped her drink.

"The most important meal of the day!" Whooves added, grinning at Fluttershy who smiled shyly back.

"Anyway, go on, please, Vinyl…"

"Okay. So it was a crap day. The weather was half-assed, it felt life couldn't get any worse and… well, I'd also been up half the night, trying to… Guh, it's so awkward but…" Vinyl leant in, beckoning Fluttershy closer. Fluttershy leant in obediently, placing her ear close to Vinyl's mouth, "but I used to… kinda… be kept awake cos I kept imagining all these… things… with Octavia and… I couldn't bring myself to sleep just in case I… dreamt about it…" Vinyl sat back, shaking her head, "It wasn't fun. I was so scared I'd do something, y'know? Not fun."

"Thoundth pretty fun to me." Derpy said. Vinyl frowned at her.

"No, it wasn't." Derpy looked over to Vinyl as if only just realising she was there.

"Excuthe me? I wath talking to Whooveth about a movie he wantth to thee, tho… I think it thoundth pretty fun."

"Oh, sorry Derps, I was…"

"You were talking about that bit weren't you?"

"Yes…"

"Oh, well, then it'th all forgiven."

"Well, that's the first I've heard about it." Octavia said, leaning in, smiling at Vinyl who jerked away, a deep blush on her face.

"You… You heard that?"

"Yes, yes I did. Vinyl, that's why people put their hands around their mouths so no-one else can hear the whisper." Octavia said, smiling as she took the cup of tea from Vinyl's hands, taking a sip.

"Yeah… well… Um, as I was saying…"

"And I'd love to go through exactly what those thoughts and dreams contained in horrific. Graphic. Detail." Octavia purred in Vinyl's ear, making her sit up practically immediately, a wobbly grin appearing on her face.

"No, pleathe, I'll be up all fucking night if you two are hard at it… again." Derpy butted in sourly, glaring at the DJ and cellist who both smiled back unabashed.

"… You were saying, Vinyl?" Fluttershy prompted, all but forgotten between the ukulele-player and DJ. Vinyl screwed her face up in thought then continued.

"Oh, right, sorry… So then, right, I was walking into the pub, all hopeful that it might be… a turning "point in the relationship" and stuff, but also hating myself for thinking that kinda thing, when waaAHAHA TAVIA STOP DOING THAT, YOU'RE TURNING ME ON IN PUBLIC!"

"Sorry." Tavia said, smiling as she stopped nibbling Vinyl's ear, exchanging a mischievous grin with Derpy. Vinyl took a few deep breaths trying to calm herself down, her mouth turned into her crooked grin. "Yes, so Fluttershy, what happened was I'd asked Vinyl to come to the Red Apple early in the morning to work on a new song which Derpy-"

"Yo."

"…already knew and…well, I'd finished setting up and AppleBloom had left us some breakfast on the bar surface before she'd left for school with SweetieBelle and Scootaloo..."

"Thothe kidth are ath thick ath thieveth, I thwear it."

"Ahem, yes, I do think so too. So Vinyl was getting her guitar out when she spotted the breakfast and-"

"Excuse me, I was telling the storyyaaAAHAHAHA I THOUGHT YOU WEREN'T GUNNA DO THAT AGAIN!!!"

"That was something different; settle down so I can finish the story."

"Y'all are back on in abou' five minu'es!" Apple-Jack called from the bar. Fluttershy rolled her eyes in exasperation.

"Thank you, Apple-Jack! As I was saying, Vinyl practically jumped over to the breakfast and, before she'd gotten there I snatched it away-"

"And then Tavia started feeding me my own breakfast, a weirdo smile on her face and I was all like… DUDE WHAT?!"

"And then that slow, adorable smile of yours crawled onto your face…"

"…As you started saying a whole boatload of suggestive things to me…"

"… And before we knew it…"

"We were in bed." Octavia looked bewildered at a very triumphant looking Vinyl-Scratch who was grinning from ear to ear.

"I'm not sure that's quite how it wentttaaAAAAH MY GOODNESS what the hell was that?" Vinyl grinned a grin akin to a shark's.

"Yeah, well, basically one suggestive thing led to another and then BAM here we are. Fun times, right?" Vinyl managed to finish as Tavia moved in for her revenge, pulling the DJ backwards from her seat so her blue-haired head was resting on the cellist's lap where she proceeded to, as Derpy put it, 'eat her fathe off'.

"Okay, y'all are all up now, git yerselves up on that stage!" Apple-Jack coming over, clapping her hands in a chipper fashion but her face drooped when she saw Vinyl and Octavia. She sighed in exasperation, turning to Derpy who had long since extinguished her cigarette and was blowing into her half-empty beer bottle, "Ah don't 'spose they'll take any notice if Ah ask them to stop?"

"Thorry, bothth (boss), they're gone."

"Thought so. Fluttershah, play the chords Derpy asks ye to play. Vinyl's guitar's up on stage. C'mon, you twos, hup hup hup!" Fluttershy would've rolled her eyes, but was too absorbed in her own thoughts.


One suggestive thing led to another, hey?
Literature > Prose > Fiction > FAMILY LIFE > Short Stories
I'm a genius, honestly, how do I do it?

This is written with a human perspective, but you can try mentally translating to pony version, but... well, good luck.

As a devout Flarity follower, I think I know who FlutterShy is thinking about at the end. But it can be whoever you want it to be for yourself.

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The Part Where Ori handles Complaints About Ditzy 'Derpy' Doo Smoking...
"Becauthe Ditthy maketh me thound like I'm dithy (dizzy) all the time. Honethtly, I don't even know what my mother wath thinking."</sub></b>

-WHY?
Well, I thought that when Derpy was younger (like teens, cs that's an influential age when you're influenced) she would've felt kind of... not in the popular crowd, I guess.

SO she tried to blend in in anyway she could think of. Shortly after losing her virginity young and becoming heavily addicted to both alcohol and cigarettes, she tried to sort herself and literally punched herself in the face every time she wanted a cigarette or a drink. So, considering how bad she was when she was 13-17, her occasional cigarette is actually really good.


-YOU'VE RUINED HER INNOCENCE!
Well, let's face it, this is a realistic version of MLP that I'm trying to do. Life is, unfortunately, not rainbows and sunshine, no-one can go through life totally innocent or untouched by things.
Derpy, because of her insecurities, wasn't just touched, but pretty much kicked in the liver.


-ANYTHING ELSE!!!!
WILL BE GONE THROUGH IN THE COMMENTS!!!! THANK YOU!!!!

---

So Yeah, what can I say, FlutterShy's looking for 'confessing help' from, basically, the worst couple you could ever ask. Whilst in the middle of rush hour at the Apple family's bar, the Red Apple...
I think that's about it.

CRITIQUES PLEASE, YIS. THANK YOU FOR ANY/ALL FAVES/COMMENTS, I MAY NOT GET BACK TO YOU BECAUSE I HAVE AN EFFORT IMPEDIMENT.

Other Human MLP:FiM Shorts:
Morning! [link]
A short story featuring Ditzy 'Derpy' Doo, VinylScratch and Octavia, merely struggling to wake up and get to work with catastrophically odd results...
Like The Professionals :meow:
An insight on how OctaScratch came into existence, a peek at FlutterShy's own romance life and basically a reason to have a little giggle.

:iconvinylscratchplz: (c) Lauren Faust
:iconoctaviaplz: (c) Lauren Faust
:iconderpyhoovesplz: (c) Lauren Faust
:iconfluttershyplz: (c) Faust again
:icondrwhoovesplz: (c) Lauren Faust lol almost wrote (c) Dr Whooves
:iconapplejackplz: (c) Lauren Faust
Every-bloody-pony else (c) Lauren Faust
Story (c) le Moi.
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:iconori-j:
Ori-J May 22, 2013
How insightful and in-depth. I totally know what you mean right there ;P

Wait, you are talking English, right?
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:iconkatban:
katban Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
me need more
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:iconcharmingchaos2012:
CharmingChaos2012 Aug 11, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Why you no write MOAR?
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:icongreatkingrat88:
Your writing style is a little rought, but all things considered it was a good short. Cute, romantic and a little funny. I suppose I found Applejack's accent a little exaggerated, and I'm not sure why you have Derpy a lisp, but as a whole it was all right.
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:iconmeandmimi:
Derpy may have had a lisp because she had a cigarette in her mouth...
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:icongreatkingrat88:
If that was the case, a mention should have been made of it.
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:iconori-j:
Ori-J Jul 11, 2012
This piece is relatively old-ish, I posted it recently only because I found it floating around laptop and thought 'meh, why not'
But the reason for linking you here was for the Derpy interpretations and my life as a cynic:
The Part Where Ori handles Complaints About Ditzy 'Derpy' Doo Smoking...
"Becauthe Ditthy maketh me thound like I'm dithy (dizzy) all the time. Honethtly, I don't even know what my mother wath thinking."

-WHY?
Well, I thought that when Derpy was younger (like teens, cs that's an influential age when you're influenced) she would've felt kind of... not in the popular crowd, I guess.

SO she tried to blend in in anyway she could think of. Shortly after losing her virginity young and becoming heavily addicted to both alcohol and cigarettes, she tried to sort herself and literally punched herself in the face every time she wanted a cigarette or a drink. So, considering how bad she was when she was 13-17, her occasional cigarette is actually really good.

-YOU'VE RUINED HER INNOCENCE!
Well, let's face it, this is a realistic version of MLP that I'm trying to do. Life is, unfortunately, not rainbows and sunshine, no-one can go through life totally innocent or untouched by things.
Derpy, because of her insecurities, wasn't just touched, but pretty much kicked in the liver.


It was cos of the whole different interpretations make for intertesting reading type thing.
And I think Derpy had a slight lisp in her original voicing :)
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:icongreatkingrat88:
I don't object to her smoking, though. It's a filthy habit IMHO, but as a literary device I've no real objection.

Interpretation is one of the main driving forces of fan fiction to begin with.

I don't think so... let me check. [link] Doesn't seem like it, although she does sound retarded.
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:iconmy-lil-dashie:
Please say you will write more of these....they're brilliant.
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